What do you think of this rap that i wrote?

honestly, that was terrible...absolutely terrible. I don't know what these other people were thinking. it is way to simple. No inline rhymes or multi's. you sound like Dr. Seuss trying to be a . You need to make more then one word rhyme at the end of your bars. there also is no flow what so ever...ever bar you spit doesn't connect to the one before it. im sorry but it is one of the worst raps i have heard...but don't let this get you down, keep writing and try to use my advice to better your understanding of rap